Pitch Review

My two out of class sources (Shane and Meredith) both provided and gave some interesting feedback. Collectively their feedback was for me to focus more and a little specific about my characters. They also want to know more about what kind of job that the character was going to have. I was also suggested to trim down my idea and focus one set area of morale or what im trying to say with this project. Overall the feedback helped me develop my idea a little bit better.